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NP11- Chapter 9

In this chapter; Edwin and the raiders are advancing toward enemy lines. Taviin attempts to use the key that Edwin has brought from the ancient vaults only to find out that it’s a fake and they are unable to open the secret entrance to get inside the kingdom’s walls. Then the Ammoreith soldiers ambush them and they are fighting against the odds of thousands. Why did the key not fit and who betrayed their plans to the king, putting them all at risk. Will they make it out alive?

 

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Edwin breathed deeply as the night’s chilly breeze swept around him bending the grass like ripples over the water; the hills rising and falling like the waves on a vast ocean broken only by patches of wiry trees. The pale moon shifted in and out of view behind dark, purple clouds which covered the rolling plains below in large, inky shadows. As he took in the dark scenic plains of Ammoreith it seemed to Edwin just like any other night. He gazed up at the sky, its innumerable stars having witnessed everything since the dawn of time. Nothing looked or felt different about tonight than any other that he had experienced and yet, the times of change rode on the air, swift and silent in its advance.

 

He prayed for their sake that their own advance on the castle would turn out to be just as swift and silent. He had entertained for so long the thought of himself flinging heroically into the battle fighting with a zealous passion for a righteous cause but never had he considered what came in between the fighting. The tedious preparation of armor suiting or the gut clenching nervousness that consumes when waiting in the calm before the storm; knowing nothing of what lies ahead but sure of the fact that pain and death are sure to follow.

 

However righteous their own cause seemed, Edwin did not feel justified as he looked down on the double edged blade that he held in his grasp. The swords sharp edges glinted white in the moonlight as he turned it over in his hand, wondering how many men had been robbed of their life with this weapon and how many more he would add to that number tonight.  How could he look into the eyes of the miracle that man—that any life form—is and decide that it is right to end his life, his dreams, his ambitions, and his potential.

 

Was this really the only way to gain peace? Edwin thought as he looked at the valiant men and women marching alongside him. Peace had always ended the story of a great battle but people seemed to forget about all the blood of war after the stains had long washed away. When does it ever end? He thought grimly. Was more killing really going to bring them a time of uninterrupted life and prosperity or would this deadly cycle just continue on generation after generation? This war that consumes all who cross its path; indifferent to age or gender.

 

He glanced sideways at Nela who was walking beside him in the front of Taviin’s ranks knowing it was possible that one of them might not have the chance to see the rise of another sun. Edwin marveled at how just how much his actions would affect this nation as their ranks marched toward the Castle of Ammoreith?

 

The Raiders had been grouped according to skill set with a row of archers in the front followed by one containing far and close combat spearmen. On the sides and in the middle were the swordsmen, with another row of archers who protected the back of their orderly brigade. Edwin didn’t get assigned a specific skill but Taviin seemed to think he was important enough to bring along and so he was handed a sword and told to keep in the front ranks should he be needed.

 

He had agreed, and even looked forward, to the chance of fighting the men who had taken so much from him but the reality of what he faced had not yet hit him then. It was just beginning to dawn on him the possibilities that this night could hold and half of them began to feed the fear that was slowly seeping into his body.  As they crested the hill it came into view; the castle which was smaller than his fist at this distance its dark stone wall had torch lights around the perimeter.

 

As they approached Edwin saw to his left a sea of mist blending to the bleak shadow in the west. But to his right, great mountains reared their heads ranging from the eastern coastline, going around the great city to create a towering barrier. They steered clear of the populated farmland villages and instead veered towards the western edge of the kingdom near the base of the dense mountains that loomed overhead.

 

When they finally arrived at the place of the entrance, Taviin ordered them to remain here while he went to open the way in. Edwin stayed crouched behind the bush watching, along with hundreds of others, as Taviin’s figure grew smaller across the short plain. When he had finally reached the small ornate door in the side of the white stone wall, Edwin tensed ready at any moment to receive the signal for the attack. But Taviin seemd to be stuggling with something and he after a while he signaled for Edwin to meet him.

 

Edwin jogged across the field feeling the heat rise in his cheeks. Though it was out of his control, he still felt responsible for whatever was going wrong as it had been up to him to get the key, but he had no idea how to fix whatever problem this might be. Taviin was glaring at him with arms crossed until he reached the door. Edwin looked from the key to Taviin and then to the door.

 

“Yes—Sir?” He asked tentatively, dreading the worst.

 

“When you got to the vaults, Edwin, how did you find this key?” Taviin said his voice falsely sweet.

 

Edwin quickly ran through the order of events during his escapade in the vaults only leaving out the personal bits when he had ventured into the well.

 

“Then will you please tell me why this key is not unlocking the door?”

 

“I—I don’t—” Edwin stuttered, his confirmed fears rendering him incoherent.

 

“You don’t what?” Taviin towered even higher as he spoke. “Edwin look out there and tell me what you see? He pointed to his right though his glare never left Edwin’s face.

 

Edwin turned to the sea of faces that stared intently at the both of them and the red deepened in his cheeks. He couldn’t speak. He was sure he had gotten the only key in the vaults it had fit the description Nela had given him perfectly. Now he and hundreds of others were treading on foreign lands at the foot of danger without a plan

 

“I have an entire army here on the battle field, Edwin, and they are waiting on my signal to attack. But your key is not—you did not do your job! All you had to do what bring it back and we all have put our lives on that pretense tonight.  If this— if I don’t— what should I do?” Taviin yelled in his face. “Should I just march back to the group and tell them, ‘Sorry! Edwin got wrong key! Maybe some other night he can try this again… We’ll just come back another time—”

 

Taviin’s rant suddenly faded away. Though his mouth continued moving Edwin couldn’t hear anything he said. Confused, he froze; the whole night seemed to have been muted… Then the voice of a small boy spoke through the silence.

 

“Edwin…”

 

The voice sounded far away as it brushed against his consciousness, like a finger trailing over his skin. He spun around; unnerved, trying to locate where the voice was coming from but it was everywhere at once.

 

“Edwin…” The voice was louder this time. “You won’t get in with that key… Leave now while you can… Before it’s too late…”

 

Then Edwin recognized the voice; it was the young prince who had called for help a few days again the forest. He had heard the same voice pierce through the confusion of battle once before just as it had silenced the world around him now. Edwin closed his eyes and raised a hand to his head trying to push his own voice through the mental connection.

 

“What do you mean ‘before it’s too late’? Can you see us? Can you help?”

 

“I could sense you as you approached the door…” The boy sounded anxious. “I like you Edwin, you’re different like me… But you need to leave now!”

 

“Why what’s wrong? What’s going to happen—?”

 

Before he could ask anything else, yells shot through the night air breaking through his mental concentration. His sense of hearing rushed back as his mind cleared and Edwin opened his eyes to look around. The Raiders were scurrying to position their defense as hundreds of Ammoreith soldiers came streaming out onto the field in an ambush.

 

Edwin was barely able to grasp the scene before someone grabbed him roughly from behind and jerked him around. Edwin only got a glimpse of Taviin, his face contorted with rage, before his fist collided hard with Edwin’s nose; the force of impact sent him crashing backwards into the grassy hill. He had felt it break and hot blood now spurted down his face as he stared up at Taviin trying to catch his breath; his astonishment and confusion leaving no room for fear.

 

“Why would you betray us?” Taviin shouted down at his sprawled figure. “These are your own people, your family even! Don’t pretend to look confused, you knew this was a trap for us!”

 

Edwin spat blood out of his mouth as he tried to speak but he could think of nothing to say that would convince Taviin that he was just as shocked by all this. He rolled over as Taviin aimed a kick at his side which only just missed him. He sprang to his feet and pulled his sword from its sheath holding it defensively in front of him.

 

“Wrong move boy! You won’t be getting out of this trap either as easily as you thought.” Taviin said, unsheathing his long black sword. “Each death out there is on your hands traitor.” He snarled and flung himself at his opponent swinging his sword horizontally to hit Edwin’s left arm. Edwin reacted but Taviin ducked underneath his sword and twisted his own arm so that his blade changed direction and shot straight up, nicking Edwin just under his right elbow.

 

Gasping, Edwin backpedaled frantically. He winced clutching at the tear in his sleeve where blood dribbled down his arm but Taviin charged at him once more, leaving no time to dwell on his injuries. Edwin reflexively parried the stab at his ribs but as their swords met the vibrations crashed through his arm like a hammer pounding a nail he already began to feel his energy drain. Sword drooping in his hand, it was all he could do to keep the black blade from piercing his body as their sinuous forms wove around each other like twisting smoke.

 

Taviin’s superior swordsmanship forced him to exercise his agility but with each blow he was forced closer to the wall. Too preoccupied to notice the roots sticking out just below his feet, his ankle came down on the point of one causing him to fall back; his sword flying out of reach. Taviin gave a victorious shout and brought his sword right over Edwin’s chest. Time seemed to slow in that moment as the blade traveled downward, toward his frantic heart. This couldn’t be it… It couldn’t end like this, not after all they had done…

 

Instinctively, Edwin grabbed a hand full of dirt and threw it in his assailant’s eyes at the same time kicking at the back of his leg so that Taviin knees buckled and he fell backwards; unable to catch himself in time. They both rolled away from each other panting and wiping sweat from their brows. Edwin grasped the hilt of his weapon but it felt so heavy in his hand that he struggled to lift it. He stood there gasping for breath knowing he wouldn’t last much longer in this battle. He was untrained and inexperienced. He couldn’t go on— couldn’t…

 

A wave of another’s consciousness suddenly washed over him; obliterating all other thought—one that wove through his mind like a mesmerizing serpent. Edwin recoiled at the intrusion but it continued weaving throughout his thoughts examining his inmost being; the flashes of past memories blinding him from the battle around him. Unable to prevent its advance, Edwin fought himself as he laid open his past, his ambitions, and his intensions to the creature. He thought of the prince who had contacted him this way and suddenly feared that he was falling prey to the king’s attack.

 

But something told him otherwise; this was not an enemy… His eyes were closed and he felt its unavoidable pull on his mind. But he could not lay there to follow it. He was in a battle, wasn’t he?

 

             “Come…” Its voice rang throughout him like musical chords as deep as the earth itself.

 

Everything was wiped from his mind and Edwin obeyed without question; walking where the summons lured him like the helpless pull of a magnet. Vaguely, Edwin watched in his mind as he got up from where he was laying and crossed the moonlit field until he came to a piece of the towering wall where a isolated willow tree grew. Edwin went past the tree and came up to the wall putting his hand out to touch it but nothing happened. He turned to notice a small drakasaur insignia that was carved into the lone tree and started to reach toward it…

 

Instantly the creature withdrew from Edwin leaving him to his self; laying on the ground feeling exposed and vulnerable. Opening his eyes, he first saw the pale moon through the branches of some scraggily trees then began looking around and then sat up surprised. He was not on the battle field anymore… He could hear it off in the distance but he was alone—alone in a small clearing that was surrounded by a circle of thick, dense trees. Standing up he walked around the clearing to check for any sign of a trap but nothing presented itself. How did I get here?

 

The clearing contained nothing else but a carved stone in the center of the grass. The moment his eyes fell on it Edwin sensed a strong draw emanating from it and he cautiously approached the stone noticing the odd silence that hung around this area. Weeds had grown over the weathered rock but the top had been smoothed flat and Edwin pulled off the growth with a mounting apprehension.

 

There, on the old stone pillar, sat an exact replica of the drakasaur insignia that was carved in the tree in his vision. He looked down at the green amethysts which were the Drakasaur’s eyes and he had the horrible feeling that it was watching him. Suddenly the hairs on the back of his neck began to prickle and Edwin swerved around searching the impenetrable blackness beyond the ring of trees. Something snapped to his right and Edwin backed behind the stone his heart racing; waiting…

 

“Edwin…?” Nela’s slim figure stepped cautiously into the pale light.

 

Edwin relaxed and let out a deep breath of relief. He started to walk toward her but stopped when she backed away from him looking scared. Her black hair was disheveled and her chain mail hung lopsided around her as she peered at him from a distance looking slightly confused.

 

“What’s wrong? What happened?” He asked gently, trying to calm her.

 

“Your…Your eyes. They were— glowing green.”

 

“They were?” Edwin said nonplussed, glancing back down at the gem-like eyes of the carving.

 

“Back there.” She motioned, after a moment, toward the battle field. “Soldiers started ambushing us from both sides and we were a flung into confusion. When I looked around, Taviin and you were fighting…” She paused staring intently into his eyes as if trying to find an explanation for herself. “How did they know we would be here tonight?

 

“I don’t know.” Edwin said quickly, trying to avoid her wrath as he had barely escaped Taviin’s. “Someone must’ve… tipped them off…” Then Edwin grew silent; an illuminating idea having just occurred to him.

 

Nela stared expectantly at him. With a suspicious voice she asked, “Why did Taviin attack you? What happened between you two at the secret entrance? Edwin…?”

 

He looked over at her, his eyes widening with comprehension. “The prince! He was the one who told the king! He must have been!”

 

Nela looked confused as she implored, “The boy?”

 

“Yeah, he called to me in the forest with his mind. I mean, he yelled for help and I heard him inside my head!” Edwin explained feverishly, as her scared look was replaced with one of concern. “He could tell I was a Rider because I was the only one who could hear him! He must have told the king and that how they knew that you had found me. That’s how they knew you were planning something.”

 

“So you’re telepathic now?”

 

“I guess.” Edwin shrugged. “It must be part of the powers Taviin was explaining.”

 

“Right…But even if they knew we were planning something with you,” Nela said, shaking her head, “how would they know we were coming tonight? It could have been any night.” She sounded skeptic.

 

“I’m not sure… Maybe the boy can read minds too?”

 

“So you didn’t contact him?” She asked quietly.

 

He looked her in the eye, hurt. Why was everyone turning on him all of the sudden?

 

“No! I didn’t even realize we were communicating telepathically until a little while ago. I thought I had just sensed his distress back in the forest, not his thoughts.”  Edwin voice faded putting them in silence, as he thought.

“Where are we?” Nela asked, changing the subject. “I saw you running across the field in the opposite direction and I thought you were—well, I thought I’d better see what you were up to. She said, her cheeks reddening.”

 

“Well,” he said, hesitant to explain since she already thought him slightly mental.

 

She raised her eyebrows daring him to try and keep something from her.

 

“Ok,” he said, “there someone who contacted my mind while I was fighting. I couldn’t resist it—I couldn’t even think for myself and as it started to bring me here. It gave me a vision of this same Drakasaur insignia,” Edwin pointed towards the stone, “that is carved into a tree beside the kingdom wall. I tried to reach it but didn’t have time. Then it was gone and I woke up here.”

 

“So, where is here? And what is this thing supposed to do?” She asked walking closer to the stone pillar.

 

“I’m not sure. But it’s got to do something right? It felt like it would open to a door or entrance of some kind.” Edwin bent over and started searching the pillar for secret knobs or levers. “What if I tried staring at the gems again? You said my eyes were glowing yellow like its gems right?” He gestured toward the stone carving.

 

“Wait how do you know this is safe?” Nela grabbed that back of his tunic and pulled him back to look at her. “Glowing eyes is not exactly normal, what if it’s a trap?”

 

“Nela, being a rider isn’t normal.”

 

“That’s not what I meant—”

 

“Nela stop! If the king isn’t stopped then everyone out here is going to die; both the soldiers and the raiders. We have to try something!”

 

Nela started to argue again but Edwin turned from her and stared intently at the stone drakasaur. Taking a deep breath, he gripped the edges of the pillar and focused on extending his thoughts out toward contacting the creature’s consciousness. After a moment of nothing, the creature finally acknowledged him. Once again he felt the touch of its powerful grip on his mind as a snake would wrap around its victim. Then it loosened its hold and slithered on pulling Edwin along its memory.

 

Once again, he crossed the moonlit field until he came to a piece of the towering wall where a isolated willow tree grew. Advancing past the tree, he came up to the wall putting his hand out to touch it but it remained immobile. He turned to notice a small drakasaur insignia that was carved into the lone tree and started to reach toward it… When he did, a tree knot near the middle of the trunk started to soften like clay and it reformed into the shape of a small handle. He could sense his own excitement through the creatures grip now as he turned the handle and—!”

 

“Edwin!”

 

He fell back to the ground with a mixture of disappointment and anger. He heaved himself off the ground and turned to round on her for interrupting but she grabbed the front of his tunic and started sprinting into the trees dragging his stumbling body along with her. Disconcerted, he had forgotten that her strength outmatched his own. Her petite body was misleading to her true abilities and it continuously caught him by surprise.

 

“What’re you doing?” He yelled. But Edwin got his answer before she could reply. Ten soldiers came pouring into the clearing just as they rounded a corner. Edwin then began to help their escape by running as fast as he could.

 

“Where are we going?” He yelled as they dodged trees in the shadows.

 

“Well…” Nela replied over her shoulder. “Did that place in your vision look peaceful?

 

“Er… Yeah…” He answered between gasps of air.

 

“Good, we’ll go there.”

 

Nela started to lead them towards the edge of the forest. Checking for the clear they then sprinted across the grassy field toward the place where the lone willow tree grew next to the south side of the wall. Hiding behind its trunk, Nela kept watch as Edwin began to search for the same carved image that matched the pillars.

 

“Edwin?”

 

“Yeah?” He answered distractedly, running his hands over the rough wood.

 

“You are sure this is a door right? This will lead us somewhere else?”

 

“Er, well I didn’t see it open but what else is a handle used for?”

 

Nela groaned. “Well, it had better be a place to hide because the soldiers have just spotted us. Edwin jerked up to look but she stopped him and added, “Just hurry!”

 

Then he spotted it. The drakasaur insignia was carved just under a large branch.

 

Uh… Edwin paused, unsure of what to do next.

 

Well? Nela asked, agitated. What now? Please tell me you know what to do!

 

Look it was you who interrupted me! This isn’t my fault!

 

Never mind that just try to figure something out! Nela pleaded.

 

Edwin turned back to the tree and tried to muster his thoughts. It was hard under the pressure but then Edwin remembered trying to reach for a handle.

 

Edwin! They’re getting closer!

 

Desperate, Edwin put his hand over the carving trying to find some button that would make the handle appear. When he did he could feel the creature again; lying dormant inside the tree… A willow tree… Just like when he found Estarlia on Haelybi Island. Focusing hard, he called to the creature with his mind and he could feel it begin to move within the tree. Several clicks later, the tree trunk started to crack open and a small archway was slowly formed in the wood.

 

The trunk opened wide enough to admit a fairly thin person. Edwin glanced quickly down the earthy shaft and then hoisted himself into the hole headfirst, pushing himself forward. He slide a considerable ways down what felt like a steep muddy bank, then landed on cold, damp earth. He stood up, looking around. It was pitch black dark but almost suddenly little lights appeared and he saw that he was in a very narrow, low, earthy passageway. A moment later he heard the cracking of the bark, a scream, and then Nela arrived by his side.

 

Before he could ask, she said breathlessly, “It closed behind me. They shouldn’t be able to follow us.”

 

Edwin nodded solemnly and then heart beating fast, both excited and apprehensive, he set off with Nela close behind.

 

The passage twisted and turned, more like the burrow of some giant animal than anything else. Edwin advanced through the tunnel with caution having no idea what obstacles may lie before then. It was completely silent between them both as they continued along in the low light. Edwin had no idea what was making the light but it was the same like that of a firefly.

 

After what felt like an hour, the passage began to rise. Panting, Edwin sped up, his face hot, his feet very cold. He came to the foot of some worn stone steps which rose out of sight above him. Careful not to make any noise, they began to climb until they arrived at the top with something just over their heads.

 

It seemed to be a trap door. Edwin stood there, listening. He couldn’t hear any sounds above him. Very slowly he pushed the trapdoor open and peered over the edge.

 

Well? Nela said impatiently, somewhere from the darkness behind him.

“This is it. We’re inside the castle wall.”

NP4- Manipulation

In the previous chapter, Edwin had just been captured by the raiders. He now wakes up in the Raiders camp. They question him and discover Edwin’s true identity and prepare to take him away. Oblivious to his anger and confusion, the Raiders lay out a quest for him, but when Edwin refuses to accept, they threaten his mother and sister with a poison. He agrees to the quest in order to protect his family but the raiders inject the poison into them anyway, leaving them roughly two weeks to live, just to be sure that Edwin will complete the task. Only when he returns with the desired item and the flower for the antidote will his mother and sister be cured.

(pictures will be added later)

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            “Is it working?”

            “Will ye give me a moment? I hadn’t even done it yet!”

            “C’mon! You were a lot faster on the last three and we don’t have any more time to waste. Orders had it that we were supposed to have moved out of here by sundown.”  The first voice suddenly became foreboding. “And you know what Taviin is like when he’s kept waiting.”

            Edwin stirred, trying to follow the conversation that he was now listening too but there was an odd ringing in his ears which made it hard to hear clearly. He didn’t know where he was or what he had been doing; only that he ached all over. He tried racking his brain for the last strand of comprehensible memories but something was disrupting his thoughts… Something that grew stronger each time he inhaled…

            He took a deep breath and all of his senses instantly shot back into full awareness. The overwhelming fume of ammonia burned his nose which reminded him of the many evenings he spent mucking the musty horse stalls. Coughing and gagging, he sat straight up on what he assumed to be a low wooden cot and waved away the smell as the horses in his mind’s eye imploded. Through watering eyes, he strained to make out his vague surroundings.

            The red and black panels of the small tent went all the way around him rising into a pointed ceiling and a loose entrance flap waved back and forth from the slight breeze. It was dark outside and the miniscule quarters were illuminated by a few candles. Each of their feeble orange light flickered against the tent walls which made each shadow appear huge and distorted. Outside, Edwin could just make out the gentle pitter-pattering of rain as it hit the canvas roof and the humid moisture made his brown shirt stick to his chest. In a different circumstance, the scene would have been quite peaceful.

            “See! There ye are!” A man’s voice spoke up brightly behind Edwin and he received a heavy pat on the back. “He should be as good as normal in a few minutes.”

            “Good… Good’’ Edwin blinked hard, rubbing his eyes, as a tall man with dark hair and long nose walked around to face him. He bent over slightly with an imploring look on his sharp features and stared at Edwin, “Can you hear me?”

            Suddenly Edwin recalled the terms by which he must have been brought to this tent; the dart in his neck, the man dropping from the tree, and his dagger falling from his hand as he blacked out on the dirt path.  He glared up at the man and nodded, not trusting his mouth to speak for him.

            “Excellent,” said the man, getting up. “Then you won’t mind answering a few questions will you?” Without pausing for Edwin answer, he walked to the edge of the tent and called to the men outside, “Erota! Orus! This one’s ready for Taviin.” Edwin tensed as two beefy henchmen came blundering into the tent towards him, swallowing what little space was left. They grabbed each of his arms and lead him outside, still stumbling due to his lethargic movements.

            The night was darker than normal underneath the widespread canopy of the Joabii trees but Edwin noticed that they were nearing the edge of the camp. They ushered him along silently looking very tired; probably having done this same thing all day. Taking his chances, Edwin jerked hard to the left, but their grip was stronger than he had expected and so he had no choice but to be dragged across the wet grass towards a long, decorated tent which stood apart from the others.

            They stopped just outside the entrance and one of the men left Edwin’s side and ducked under the flap. He could hear low voices coming from inside the tent. Leaning in closer, he tried to pick up on the conversation, but just then the entrance flew open again, making Edwin jump back; he hadn’t expected the man to be back so soon. A pair of hands grabbed his shirt and he was shoved roughly inside and brought to the center of the floor where he was forced onto his knees. Edwin was at least grateful that this ground was dry and carpeted as he sat awaiting his interrogation; feeling oddly disconnected from any emotion.

             The two henchmen retreated back to the outside of the tent, leaving Edwin amongst the flickering glow of the candles. It took him only a second to realize that he was not alone in the tent. A dark, cloaked figure stood on the far side, hunched over a table with his back to Edwin. He seemed content not to say anything and so for a while all they did was listen to the light pattering of rain on the tent roof.

            Then the man, whom Edwin assumed to be Taviin, spoke up. “So you thought you could single-handedly outwit an entire brigade of skilled fighters did you?” He said, turning around to face Edwin. “Thought that you alone could avoid detection and save the day?”

            Edwin didn’t want to say “yes, that he had thought those very things” so he continued glaring up at his captors amused face, hating the man more and more with each passing second.

            “Well, hopefully you’ve learned well enough by now to know that your feeble attempts are no match to get in the way of what we set out to achieve.” Having made his point, Taviin changed the subject. “So you have a name I take it?” He asked conversationally and started pacing around Edwin.

            “Why should I tell you?” Edwin didn’t mean it to come out in a snarl but he was already annoyed at his humiliation and was tired of being bossed around.

            “But why shouldn’t you tell me?” Taviin stopped behind Edwin’s back. “All we want is a few questions answered and you felt like you needed to run away. Now you won’t even give us your name.” He leaned in closer to Edwin’s ear and said, “Which makes me think that you might be concealing something important.”

            “Do you?” Edwin scoffed. “What kind of information would I have that’s of any importance to you? And what have you done to me to make me want to tell you anything?” He smiled in spite of himself; it felt good to have some hold over the conversation.

            Taviin seemed to pick up on this too because he roughly grabbed a fistful of Edwin’s hair and yanked his head back so that they were looking at each other once again. “I’m the one asking questions boy,” he growled in a low whisper and Edwin could feel a few hairs part company with his head, “and it’s what we’re going to do that you should worry about… I’ve been gentle with you but it’s getting late and I’m about ready to try a more effective way of getting answers.”

            Edwin eyed the array of weapons that lay on the table with apprehension and his courage failed him. “What do you want from me?”

            “Well now,” Taviin smiled and let go of Edwin, “Let’s just start with your name.”

            “It’s Edwin.”

            Taviin stopped pacing. “Really…And tell me Edwin, what is your mother and father like?”

            “Well my mother… er…” Edwin was confused on how to answer. “She weaves and makes clothes for the village and I work too because my father—”

             “Oh no,” Taviin interrupted pleasantly. “I meant your real mother and father. That woman in the village has taken you in, yes, but you are obviously not from here.”

            Edwin furrowed his brow. He had often wondered about his real parents, but no one knew anything about them and so he’d always drop the subject as hopeless. “Well, I guess they— I don’t know. I don’t remember them.”

            Taviin walked in front of Edwin and stared at him with great interest.  “At what age did you come to this village?”

             Edwin began to wonder where these questions were leading them. “It was— I was about six or seven. Why is it important?” He asked quickly.

            “Because something very—” Taviin stopped and Edwin saw something of a shadow cross the man’s haughty features, the lines in his face seemed deeper. He turned his back to Edwin. “–very tragic happened ten years ago that the world won’t easily forget…” Taviin swiveled around to face Edwin and asked suspiciously, “Have you ever heard of Haelybi Island?”

            “Haelybi—? Er… Yeah,” said Edwin, bewildered. “I think so.”

            “Well? What do you know about it?” Taviin pressed, impatiently.

            “It’s… Er…I know it was”— Edwin felt his face go red under Taviin’s intense stare— “Well, it’s an island!”

            With intense effort, Taviin refrained from rolling his eyes. “Yes!” He said in a false congratulatory voice. “It is an island! But do you have any idea of why I might bring this up now? Any idea what happened there ten years ago or is it all some big mystery to you?”

            When Edwin just sat there with a blank expression Taviin threw his hands up. “You don’t know!” He said incredulously. “All this time I thought you were hiding but you don’t even know!”

            “Know what? Edwin asked, exasperated now. He was amazed that this man expected a complete stranger to have all the answers to every random question that was thrown at him. He had been raised in the village for as long as he could remember, never having the chance to be properly schooled, and he didn’t care anything about this “Haelybi” Island.

            “You don’t know who you really are– or anything about your past!” Taviin gaped. “You should have been seven when it happened, surely you remember something?”

            “Remember what? I don’t– WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT?” Edwin yelled. Why was this man acting as if he knew him; like some long lost relative?

            “Are you even aware, Edwin, of how this war started? And why we have suffered for the past ten years?”

            “Yeah,” said Edwin, his temper rising, “Because people like you can’t mind your own business. You come into villages and tear families apart so you can get whatever you want from them. You just can’t accept the rules and live peacefully.”

            Taviin gripped the edge of the high backed chair, his knuckles white, struggling with his next words. Then he relaxed and for a moment he restrained from saying anything, and regarded Edwin with an unreadable expression. “This will be loads easier if you actually knew why we’re looking for you in the first place.” he said quietly.

            Edwin nodded his head in a “that’s-what-I’ve-been-trying-to-tell-you” vent. “Why are you here, what do you want, and when can I go?” He asked bluntly.

            Taviin took a deep breath. “I don’t expect you to understand this right now but we are actually here to restore peace to this land.” Ignoring Edwin’s look of disbelief he continued, “The Saurian Raiders is all that is left of the Saurian people. Ten years ago we were living in a time of great prosperity on Haelybi and we never asked for any trouble. But the power of our people was rising and that seemed to scare others. The king of Ammoreith grew fearful of the power we possessed and sought to annihilate the threat we posed to his reign.”

             Taviin grew silent for a moment and looked off into the distance, seeing something that Edwin could not. “It was the day of the summer solstice,” he said in a far off voice, “which is the only time in which the riders are drained of their powers. It was treated like a spiritual renewal and the kalantheiar palaces would through a series of celebrations for the people to accompany the unique occasion.” Taviin frowned, “Then without warning, army forces attacked the island while we were unprepared, unsuspecting, and defenseless. He was there to kill the riders on the one day that they are most vulnerable but with them he took an unthinkable number of innocent souls down into the grave. Only a small portion was able to flee the island and we’ve been here on the mainland ever since, forced to live a wanted life constantly hunted by the king.”

            “Look,” said Edwin, quietly as Taviin’s voice faded. “I appreciate the history lesson, but what’s this got to do with me?” He shifted from his uncomfortable position on the floor, and tried to rub off the painful tingling sensation in his knees.

            “Because, Edwin, you are the last of the Saurian Riders.” Silence fell on the tent like a heavy blanket as they stared at each other.

            Edwin raised his eyebrows, trying not to laugh at the intensely serious stare that Taviin was beholding him with. “Really,” he said, sarcastically.

            Taviin suddenly became agitated at Edwin’s reaction to this news or rather his “lack of reaction”. “Why else would you have the Saurian insignia on your right arm?”

            “If you mean my— Wait! How do you know about my tattoo?”

            “So you do have it!” He strode over to Edwin and pulled back his sleeve revealing a black Draksaurian symbol inked into his fair skin. Taviin’s eyes widened and he smiled maliciously. “It appears we have finally found who we’ve been looking for.” He let go of Edwin’s arm with a slight jerk.

            “What? No!” Edwin yelled as Taviin gestured a hand signal to a man standing outside the tent. “Wait who’s the one you’re looking for? I don’t have any powers, it can’t be me! I’m just a villager.”

            “Ah but you weren’t always!” He laughed at Edwin’s stunned confusion, “Oh no! You used to live like royalty in the castles of Kalantheiar, that is, until the king decided he didn’t want our kind around…” Taviin expression suddenly grew dark and distant. “Our homes, our land,” he said in a quiet voice, “our freedom, and our families were ripped away from us. But not anymore, no… Now that we’ve found you, we have a chance to bring down the one man who unleashed this terrible injustice.”

            A pair of hands gripped both of Edwin’s arms and forced them behind his back. “Hey! Let me go!” A thick rope bound his hands tight. “What are you doing?” Edwin said, glaring up at his captor.

            “Well, Edwin,” he said calmly, starting to pace again, “There’s a small problem. You obviously don’t believe me right now and I’ve got to have your complete cooperation for this all to work. You see, I’ve been developing a plan for years that will dethrone the king of Ammoreith, but each time something was missing. The secret weapon I’m after is actually a key that will give us access to the Ammorieth castle walls. It currently lies hidden in the vaults on Haelybi Island but no one has been able to get to it— no one except a Saurian rider.” Taviin smiled and bent down until he was eye level with Edwin. “This is what you’re here for… This is what you’re going to do for me.”

            Edwin scowled, “Look, if you think that I’m just going to believe this stupid, made-up story then—”

            “I know it’s a lot to take in,” Taviin said, cutting him off, “but I’ve been searching for you a long time and am tired of waiting for this war to end. I’m not about to waste loads of valuable time gaining your trust, or becoming friends, or whatever other fantasies you’d have hoped for. We are on the same side but I need you to accept and complete this quest now.

            He signaled again with his hands and Edwin turned to see two men roughly dragging his mother and sister into the tent; their hands and feet bound as well. He turned back to face Taviin and for the first time that night he was scared. “What do I have to do?”

NP3- The Saurian Raiders

Chapter 1: The Saurian Raiders

            Meet 17 year old Edwin getting ready for his daily life in the small village of Joabola which he calls home. Everything starts out as any ordinary day until the feared Saurian Raiders are spotted marching into the village rounding up every teenage boy they can find for questioning. Edwin’s best friend is rounded up among the rest and when Edwin goes looking for help, he is stunned with a dart and is captured by the Raiders.

*****

 

 It was nearing day break and the first golden rays of dawn were just peeping through the thick canopy of jungle leaves and into a small hut window.  The dark emptiness began to take shape as the light illuminated the modest contents of the primitive room. Edwin tiredly swung his feet out one side of his low bamboo bed and rubbed the sleep from his dark brown eyes. Ignoring the painful protests of his body, he hobbled blindly across the boarded floor until he found the only table in the room. His hands gripped the clay water basin and, taking a deep breath, he splashed the frigid water into his face. Though he did this every morning, Edwin was no more accustomed to its intense shock that jolted through his body than from the first day he started.

A smile tugged at the corner of his mouth as he remembered his father laughing at the look on his face after the first time he had dunked his head in the icy basin. Between gasps of laughter his father had managed to say that his face had the same likeness of a shriveled up prune. But that was a long time ago and Edwin shook his head (looking very dog-like) trying to rid himself of the distracting thoughts, realizing that he had stopped getting ready. Grumbling, Edwin didn’t dare imagine the horrors that would occur if he were to show up for work late again. 

Feeling anxious, he pulled the loose brown shirt over his fair skinned chest and after ruffling his jet black hair, Edwin, satisfied with his appearance, grabbed his harvesting harness and crept as quickly and quietly as he could down the bamboo ladder. Having memorized every non-squeaky board, Edwin tip toed across the floor, trying not to disturb his mother and sister who slept in the other room. He passed the counter and sighed longingly. No breakfast again…

He stepped out onto the rickety porch shimmering with golden sun and slowly closed the door behind him. Taking a deep breath of the chilly morning air, Edwin looked out at the streaming light which unveiled the vivid colors of his lush jungle home. He could now easily make out the other village tree huts suspended high above the jungle floor and the network of rope bridges drooping slightly like the strings of a spider’s web.

Edwin started down the rope bridge but suddenly stopped again. Something seemed different about the morning, something felt wrong. He turned around searching for someone but there was not a single villager to be seen. There was no bird song, no monkeys chattering; everything was still. The flat chill in the morning air intensified and Edwin could feel the hairs on the back of his neck prickling.

Edwin weighed the possibility of some new holiday or curfew that everyone seemingly forgot to tell him about, but discarded the thought; it was too hard to keep secrets in a village as small as this. Besides Araan would have warned him if there was some new rule, his father was the chief. Perhaps this is his idea of a joke. Edwin paused, no. That didn’t feel right either. He squinted out over the ground below but he couldn’t see much through the thick leaves. Nothing moved or made a sound throughout the whole village but he could still sense another’s presence.

Unnerved, Edwin laid his harness down and continued cautiously, scanning for sudden movements or anything that appeared odd.  Reaching ground level, Edwin backed up to the base of the thick Joabii tree and waited, listening to the dull pounding of his heart. A scream suddenly split the silence making Edwin jump followed by a crash and then a low moaning. Heart racing, he leaned over and glanced down the main village path.

Edwin froze. There in the middle of the square was the giant, scaly body of a Horned Malasaur and its rider standing over the body of a – “Oh no.” he breathed. Araan? Edwin stared in disbelief at the tall leather-clad man who standing over his friend; a Saurian Raider? He had heard rumors about their cruel raids on the southern villages but he didn’t think they’d come this far north. What did they want with the chief’s son? Edwin knew that Araan had rarely left the village borders so he couldn’t have done anything to make them mad. Maybe they sought revenge for something the chief had done; the man could be cruel at times. But he and the other men of the council were away signing a peace treaty with the village of Lamia.

More huge beasts were now arriving each with their own riders. The man nearest, who had a weasel-ish look, spoke up in a low voice. “Is it him Taviin?

The man on the ground answered. “I don’t know it could be. He’d be about this age.” Turning away from Araan, who was still sprawled on the ground, the large man called Taviin ordered to the others in a gruff voice, “Spread out and round up every teenage boy in this village. Leave no one unchecked!”

“Araan! No–” Edwin watched as Araan’s mother came running out of the hut still in her night gown. “What are you doing? What do you want with him?”

“We’re looking for someone and he could be here.” Taviin said, stepping in between her and her son. “We are taking every boy into question.”

“You have no right coming here and breaking into our homes!” She shouted in his face. “Get out of our village and leave us all alone!” She looked down, the tears coming down her cheeks. “Too many have already been taken from this place.”

Taviin laughed and held her back as his men dragged Araan onto the back of a malaysaur and started off. “Don’t worry! We’re only looking for one so you’ll see your son again soon.” The man smiled maliciously, “If he’s not the one that is…”

Edwins tree hut

Edwins tree hut

Edwin’s blood ran cold as he watched the Raiders break open every door and lead each boy into the street. Some of the men who were left behind started to fight but were easily outmatched by the Raiders. A few tried to make a break for it but they didn’t get very far before being caught. He pushed back from the tree shaking with anger. This was just like when the king’s soldiers came rounding up men, including his father, for the war. They didn’t have a choice but to be dragged cruelly away from their families and once they were gone, they didn’t come back.

One of the raiders started in his direction. Trying not to panic with the shouts and screams echoing up from the other houses, Edwin ran back up the wobbly bridge, across the bamboo porch, and slammed the thin wood door behind him. He stood there in the dark for a moment taking deep breaths, digesting the magnitude of the scene he had just witnessed.

Aniygwa  (Edwin's foster mom)

Aniygwa (Edwin's foster mom)

He couldn’t leave his mother and sister. Their safety was the only promise he’d ever made to his father and he couldn’t let anything happen to them— not while I still have breath in my body, he thought.

The bedroom door before him flew open and Edwin looked up to see the two frightened faces of his mother and sister.

“Edwin?” His mother said in a sharp voice coming out of the small room. “What’s going on? Her worn dark eyes widened with concern. “We thought we heard—”

She was interrupted by another scream and what sounded like splintering wood from below. Edwin nodded his head and tried to keep his voice calm for their sake.

“It’s the Saurian Raiders. They said they’re—”

“What?” His younger sister Dahya interjected, her deep brown eyes widening with fear. “We haven’t done anything to bring them here!”

 Dahya  (Edwin's younger foster sister)

Dahya (Edwin's younger foster sister)

“Yes, I know,” Edwin continued, but—”

“Are they going to kill us?”

“No! Well—I mean, I don’t know.” Edwin tried to sound controlled. “I don’t think so but—”

“Well, c’mon!” Dahya grabbed her mother’s arm and pulled. “We have to run now! They’re coming!”

“Wait! No!” Edwin tried to grab his sister’s arm but she jumped out of reach. “Look Dahya, would you just—”

“Just what exactly?” She yelled at him, losing it. “Oh, you mean wait till they come crashing through our door?

“Yes! No!” Edwin recoiled at her incredulous stare. “I just mean to say—”

“Maybe you’ll figure out what your trying say when they burst through that door,” she said pointing vigorously at a spot above Edwin’s head. “Why don’t you wait here to invite them nicely into our house?”

“Dahya! Just listen,” pleaded Edwin in a hoarse whisper. “I heard them and they only—”

“I know! I’ll just make some hot tea,” she ranted on throwing her arms in the air, “and we can all sit around and have a nice talk about the ways we’d prefer to die!”

A malaysaur hissed below them and they heard the sound of a man dismounting onto the dirt path.

“DAHYA! Shut it!” Edwin hissed. “Listen! They’re looking for someone and they’re taking every boy here into question. I don’t know what they’re really up to but I can’t leave you two alone.” Ignoring Dahya’s snort, Edwin pressed on. “He’s coming to search the house— Dahya you have to go to my room and pretend it’s yours. Mum, just lie about me ok?”

She nodded but Dahya shook her head, “Wait? But why wouldn’t they just recognize the boy their looking for when they found him? Why do they have to—”

“Look I dunno!” Edwin said cutting her off as the man’s footsteps started up the rope bridge. “But they shouldn’t hurt you two, just make sure they don’t know I’m here got it?”

Without waiting for a reply Edwin ran to the back of the room, squeezed through the small window, and climbed out onto the thick tree branch. He edged closer to the trunk and pulled himself up higher, out of view from the window. Just as he concealed himself in a hollow, he heard a banging on the front door and his mothers shaky reply. But before she could reach the door it flew open and a tall beefy man, clad in black and red, stood, towering in the doorway. He spoke in a gruff voice.

“We’re rounding up every boy for questioning!

“Why? What for?”

“Never you mind,” he said aggressively. “Just move aside, I’m to search the house.”

Edwin closed his eyes as he heard their pots shatter on the floor from inside the hut. It had taken them month’s to raise enough money to get those to store their food in.

“We don’t have any boy’s living here! Please stop!” Her voice sounded close to breaking as the leather-clad man overturned their few remaining belongings. A door burst open knocking over a water basin, which broke to pieces. Someone stepped over the bits of broken clay which crunched underneath them.

“Who lives in ‘ere?”

“Er… Me! I do. It’s my room.” Dahya said quickly.

“Then why wasn’t the bed slept in eh?”

“What? It was— I did— I’ve— just made it up already!” She invented wildly playing nervously with her straight black hair..

He eyed her, seeming to pick up on the nervous habit and asked, “So why are there two beds in the other room,” he said slowly turning back to face them, “If you’ve only got two people livin’ here.”

“Er. It’s— Well…Thats—”

“—my cousin’s bed!” Their mother finished for her.

At both of their questioning gaze she continued.

“You see, she’s staying here for a while from Lamia which is about two leagues south! Right quaint place it is. Very lovely this time of year, you should—”

“I don’t care ‘bout that!” The man growled waving his hand and turning back to the door. “Fine! I guess ye’ve got no one here of importance. I’ll just leave ye be. We won’t be here much longer and ye can get back to yer miserable lives,” he sniggered looking at the pitiful state of the house.

After a few heavy footsteps, the front door swung open and the big man tromped down the rope bridge and heaved himself up into his malaysaur saddle.  Edwin shifted his footing and the branch underneath snapped. Heart stopping, he gasped and caught the branch just overhead to keep from falling over. Below, the malaysaur’s huge plated head jerked up at the noise, its grey scaly snout flicking a large forked tongue in the air. Edwin held his breath and kept very still; praying that the low morning light would still be enough to disguise him amongst the leaves.

After a moment, the man clicked his tongue and the beast hissed and slunk around the sparse trees toward the main square; its thick tail swinging back and forth. Edwin marveled at how such brute creatures could be so easily tamed by these men as he pulled himself up onto the branch. The Malaysaur’s grey head and body was much like an alligators, but its legs were much more muscular and it walked with a wide swaying motion. Its head and back were plated with thick scales and bulky horns stuck out near the head with four long ones on the tip of its tail. Whether it was the horny backside or fangs in the front, by the time you found the weak spot on these creatures it would be too late.

Taking a deep breath, Edwin crept back through the small window and dropped down into his now demolished bedroom. He sighed, looking down at the shattered fragments of his water basin. It had been handmade by his father from red clay that Edwin collected himself. But he pushed the thought aside and headed into the dark living room to find his mother and sister.

“Oh Edwin you’re safe!”

His mother’s short thin figure stepped into view. Edwin smiled down at her. Her tan skin was burned often from the hot jungle sun and worn from all the years of hard work. Her long black hair was tightly braided behind her back and her face, though still beautiful, was so care worn from her hard life’s struggle; her eyes having seen so much pain and destruction. He would have done anything to lift her burden and see her happy again.

“Good, they didn’t see you then.” She continued and walked up to him. She had to stand on the tip of her toes to hug his neck. “I was so scared that— Well, I wouldn’t want—”

“—Shh. It’s alright they didn’t see me.” He smiled and leaned over placing his hands on her shoulders. Looking in her eyes he said firmly, “But I’m still going out there.” He held up a finger up to silence her protest before continuing. “Araan was captured and there’s no telling what they’ll do to him… But I don’t believe these Raiders came all this way just to ask questions. Someone’s got to go help him.”

“And you think you could?” Dahya scoffed crossing her hands. “Are you mad?” Edwin looked crossly at her. His sister had inherited her mother’s Indian beauty which glowed from her youthful face. She was fifteen, two years younger than Edwin, and very outspoken. “You’re a horrible fighter! You got sent home after passing out twice during training remember?”

“I was only twelve!” Edwin retorted defensively.And I had to face a full grown man!” He straightened back up. “It wasn’t a fair session and they wouldn’t let me go back afterwards. But I’m seventeen now and more than capable of handling a sword.”

“Ha! You mean a little knife,” she laughed, “You’re little dagger isn’t much of a match against a trained Saurian Raider’s sword.”

Edwin frowned, offended, as he picked up his favorite dagger and attached it to his belt. “Well I’ve trained too—and not by myself!” He added to her raised eyebrows. “And I know I can help Araan.” Turning around defiantly he clasped a tattered brown cloak and hood over his shirt which swallowed his figure.

“Edwin, wait!” His mother grabbed hold of his shoulder. “Your sister’s right. This is insane! You know you can’t free them by yourself, there’s too many.”

“You can’t stop me so please don’t try,” Edwin said firmly turning around to face his mother’s scared face.

His sister rolled her eyes, “Oh stop trying to be a hero, you’ll look ridiculous!”

Sighing he said quietly, “The tribe men won’t be back till tomorrow and my friend needs my help. I have to try!”

“Then why don’t you go send word to the chief,” Dahya offered.  With them we’ll at least have a fighting chance, though, we don’t even know for sure if anyone needs rescuing.” She paused, “The Raiders said they were only after one and he’s probably not even here.”

Edwin looked down at the dagger in his hand knowing she was right. “Fine, I’ll go up the river to Lamia.”

Edwin’s mother stepped closer, obviously relieved, and patted his back, “Be careful.”

“Don’t worry,” he reassured her, “I’ll be fine.”

With that he walked out and shut the door behind him. Peering out over the edge of the porch, he made sure the coast was clear. There were villagers hustling around the square, many in aimless distress, but all the Raiders seemed to be gone, except for two guards. Edwin assumed that most of them had already left with those rounded for questioning. He pulled the hood over his head and began his way down the rope ladder on the opposite side of the porch. He had just reached the ground when a twig snapped in the bushes behind him.

Edwin swirled around searching the leaves for any movement but after a moment of silence he moved on, choosing a longer route which would keep him out of range of the Raider’s camp. Coming up to the main path, Edwin took refuge behind a large fern and peered down each direction. It was brighter out now, as the sun rose higher in the sky and there was no movement on either side yet he stayed crouched down, listening to each and every sound.  After a few non eventful minutes and without an excuse to linger he got up, and after shaking the feeling back into his legs, hopped down onto the leaf-strewn path.

He paused and looked back; there was an odd silence around this place and Edwin couldn’t shake the feeling that a presence other than his own was present. But no one came out. He took a deep breath and a sudden whistling noise shot past his ear and a sharp point stung the back of his neck.

“Ahh!” Edwin gasped in pain and groped for the thin dart protruding from his skin as a cloaked man dropped down from a tree beside him. A man garbed in red and black; it was a Raider. Heart pounding, Edwin staggered back, pulled his dagger from its leather hilt, and prepared for the fight.

“You forgot to search the trees,” said the dark haired man, in apparent smugness. He twirled a long blow pipe around in his fingers before stowing it back in his belt. He smiled expectantly at Edwin, who was now having difficulty focusing on his assailant.

Edwin blinked hard trying to ward off losing his consciousness as the man paced closer. He was repulsed at his stupidity and shamed at how easily he had been overtaken. “Wha’do you want wim’me?” He managed to get out before he heard the sound of his dagger hit the ground and a pain in his knees as they buckled sending him hard into the black dirt. The world spun around him as a dark figure stepped over his helpless form.

“Oh you’ll find out soon enough, said the voice.” And Edwin knew no more.

NP2- Haelybi Chapter Outline

Chapter 1:

Meet Edwin and get an introduction to his daily life and his family during his usual work routine in the small village of Joabola which he calls home. Everything starts out as any ordinary day until the feared Saurian Raiders are spotted marching into the village questioning anybody they can find. Most of the teen boys of the villagers are taken and when Edwin goes looking for help,  he is stunned with a dart and captured by the Raiders.

 

Chapter 2:

Edwin wakes up bound tight in the Raiders camp. They question him and discover Edwin’s true identity and prepare to take him away. Oblivious to his anger and confusion, the Raiders lay out a quest for him to retrieve the “Key of Zarneth” that lay in the chambers deep below Haelybi Island. They tell him he is the last of the Saurian Riders who is able to access the chambers but when Edwin refuses to accept the quest, they use a little incentive. They present a poison which slowly spreads through the bloodstream stopping body functions until it induces a coma and if left untreated, will eventually kill its victim. The flower that will make the antidote can only be found on Haelybi Island. Edwin believes that the poison is for himself and still refuses, but is surprised when they bring out his mother and sister and threaten their lives. He agrees to the quest in order to save his family but they inject the poison into them anyway, leaving them roughly two weeks to live, just to be sure that Edwin will complete the task. To save the only family he has left, Edwin must now journey to Haelybi and retrieve both the “Key of Zarneth” from the ancient vaults and the petals of the Fire lily. Only when he returns with both items will his mother and sister be cured.

Chapter 3:

So, Edwin is assigned two Saurian scouts who know the route and together they set out on the three day trek to Haelybi. Nela (Nelalandra in full) and Kanashi are about the same age as Edwin and together they travel fast and with few supplies. They encounter challenging obstacles where they are forced to trust one another and work as a team. The reader gets to know each of the main characters better and Edwin wrestles with what is right for his family, his part in the war, and his own life.

Chapter 4:

During the second day of the journey, they encounter a small group of the king’s men guarding the young prince of Ammoreith on an excursion between kingdoms. Nela, overcome with hatred, wants to strategically ambush the squad to get back at the king by killing his only son. Though Edwin can relate to the hurt that wells up inside her, having struggled most of his life and lost family on the king’s behalf, he begs her to leave them alone. But despite his pleas and warnings that revenge is not the right action, she starts the attack anyway and they are all flung into the fray. She falls many soldiers and is lightly wounded but when she gets to the young prince, Edwin flings himself in front of the boy and takes most of the blow into his shoulder. Nela is furious at Edwin but they drag him to safety away from the rest of the soldiers and their wounds are tended to. Edwin tries in everything to live up to the virtues taught to him by his father and Nela’s bitter heart is changed by the love and forgiveness that Edwin shows.

Chapter 5:

After three days of travelling, they finally reach the Island and Edwin, caring most about his mother and sister’s recovery, first searches for the Fire Lilies. They are unable to scale the cliff side and make camp for the night brainstorming on a way to get up. That night, Edwin has a visionary dream about a Draksaurian creature and of a place where the creature is trapped on the island. He wakes, knowing that he alone had the power to free it.

Chapter 6:

Edwin wonders away from camp following the land images given to him in his dream. He finds the ancient tree that cacoons the Draksuarian and calls out the creature’s name in the ancient language. The Draksaurian is released and finally meets Edwin as his master. Together, they are able to reach the fire lilies and when they return to camp, Edwin tells Nela and Kanashi to take the flower back home without him, but they refuse to abandon him in the most dangerous part of the trip. Running out of time, they hurry to the cave called the Eye of the Serpent and enter the labyrinth to retrieve the “Key of Zarneth”.

 

Chapter 7:

Trying to survive the many traps hidden in the labyrinth, Edwin uses his newfound power from the Draksaurian creature to find the masked entrance. Edwin enters the ancient chambers and locates the “Key of Zarneth”, but the seer’s well, that also lay in the vault, tempts him to look inside its depths. Edwin succumbs to its taunts and once inside he is given back every memory that was ever lost, every childhood memory is returned to him revealing the attack on his people, his real mother and father’s death, and his old home burning down to the ground. In a single instant, all the old bitter emotions flood back to him. Furious and overcome with grief, Edwin takes the “Key of Zarneth”, and races off the Island convinced that killing the king is the only way to rid the land of his evil.

Chapter 8:

He flies back to the rest of the Saurian Raiders with the key and once inside they attack the castles defenses. Edwin eventually finds the king and the moment of truth is upon him to decide the fate of the king and, in turn, the whole land of Ammoreith.

Chapter 9:

Edwin battles the king but when he has the advantage, he looks up and sees Nela there looking at him. Something in her expression reminds him of his own father looking at him with that same questioning gaze. He has a flashback of his father’s lessons and realizes that killing and struggling for power will never fix the evil, even if his intensions were for the good of the land. Trying to bring the world to peace by killing won’t work and would only make him as bad as the king himself. Edwin chooses to forgive his past and he sees the king as a struggling brother, not an enemy.

When asked why he spared the undeserving king, Edwin replies; “Because I did not seek victory, I sought peace.”

Chapter 10:

Edwin then takes position as temporary ruler, and begins the steps toward peace.

NP1- Haelybi (SA)

Title: Haelybi

Author: Leah Sands

Genre: Science fiction, mystery, action and adventure….

Audience: Ages 12+

Characters

List the characters in the story and give a thorough description of each one. Consider physical, emotional, relational, social status, and occupational characteristics.

Edwin Araglane:  <] )))   (ed-win) (are-ah-glain)

Edwin Araglane is a 17 year old boy who is familiar with the poverty and hard work of surviving in the dangerous jungles of Enisce. He has straight, black hair and deep brown eyes like the rest of the village, but his fair skin is what gives away his unique past. –

He was the last of the Saurian people to be born as a Saurian rider when the King of Ammoreith attacked his home on Haelybi Island in hopes of annihilating the last race who could threaten his reign. In the raid, at the age of six, Edwin received a head injury in which he lost every past memory. Jambala, the local healer woman, rescued and escaped with him to the jungle village of Joabola. There she gave him to a foster family, keeping secret his true identity, to be raised as a normal villager. –

Years later, when word of his existence is discovered, the Saurian Raiders come to find him in hopes of using him to bring down the King of Ammoreith. Edwin is blackmailed into accepting the quest and finds himself in a position of great responsibility and power. He tries to uphold what is right, as his father taught him, in order to change his life, as well as every life in the kingdom of Ammoreith’s, for the better.

Nelandra Firaline: <] )))  (knee-lawn-drah)  (fear-ah-leen)

Nela

Nela

Smart, beautiful, and skilled as fighter Nilandra, or Nela for short, is quick witted and always first to think of the next step. When her inventive plans fail however, her reliable initiative takes hold of the situation. She is a member of the Saurian Raiders and is selected as one of the scouts to lead Edwin to Haelybi. She has bright blue eyes, straight black hair, and a toned body from her constant traveling.

Having been orphaned along with her brother after watching her parents executed by the cruel reign of King of Ammorieth she struggles with her hatred toward him and forgiving those who were responsible for her hard life. Having been mistreated by the evilness of others, she has built up thick walls around her heart unable to trust any but her brother. But when she sees Edwin’s good heart and selfless love she opens herself to him.

Kanashi Firaline: <] )))  (kin-aush-ee)  (fear-ah-leen)

Kanashi

Kanashi

Kanashi is the older brother of Neladra and is very protective of her.  He grew up as an aspiring warrior-in-training of the Saurian raiders who took him and his sister Nela in when their home was destroyed by orders of the king. Forced to mature quickly when his parents were killed in the King’s raid on Haelybi, he cultivated his warrior skills with a militant zeal determined never to be helpless again when those he loved needed him.

Kanashi has short black hair, dark brown eyes, and light tan skin. He is the most comical character in the story and often provides the source of comic relief.

King Raktivar:  <] )))  (Rack- tiv-are)

The King of Ammoreith who feared that the power of the Saurian people would rise up against him and so he attacked their race, in hopes of annihilating the threat they posed. His main mission was to wipe out the Saurian Riders, who governed the island, but in his attack the whole island fell and most of the Saurian people who escaped went into hiding (later forming the band of Saurian Raiders).

Taviin:    He is the leader of the Saurian Raiders who seeks vengeance for the death of his wife, who was killed by the King of Ammoreith. He leads the forces in the last battle against the kingdom determined to take repayment in blood for what the king had done. Though he actually seeks peace for his people, he believes that killing the king is the only way to achieve that goal and is willing to do anything to see it done.

Elza & Thoran Araglane: They are Edwin’s biological parents who were killed during the King’s raid when Edwin was only six.

Aniygwa

Aniygwa

Aniygwa: Aniygwa is Edwin’s foster mother whom he loves and has promised to his father to keep safe.  Aniygwa is poisoned by the Saurian Raiders as an incentive, forcing Edwin to accept the quest.

Dahya: Dahya is Edwin’s younger foster sister who is very opinionated and outspoken. She is also poisoned by the

Dahya

Dahya

Saurian Raiders as an incentive, forcing Edwin to accept the quest.

Kalanga: Kalanga was Edwin’s foster father who taught him most of the virtues that Edwin lives by. His father was executed by the King which creates a big factor in Edwin’s struggle to forgive the king.

Zarneth–   Zarneth was the name of the first draksaurian to become tamed by a human.

Agidale-   Agidale was the name of the first saurian rider

Jumbhala: She is the old woman healer who rescued Edwin from the King’s raid on Haelybi and took him to live in the small village of Joabola.

Point of View

Who tells the story?

The story is focused on Edwin but the readers feel as if they are observing each scene as if standing beside Edwin; however, they do have access to Edwin’s thoughts, emotions, etc… It is written in both first and third person.

Setting

Write a sentence stating the time and place of the story.

The story starts in a time similar to Earth’s medieval 1100’s but takes place in the strange lands of Haelybi. Varying from the lush Jungles of Enisce, seaside plains and rocky crags of Araseail, desert wastelands of Ireis, and deep caves of Haelybi the mapping is of a different world but the atmosphere, plants, and chemistry is, for the most part, the same as Earth’s. The only notable difference is the magic of the draksaurian and other mythical creatures.

Plot Outline

Write a paragraph summarizing the story (6-8 sentences).

Edwin considers himself to be as normal as any other teenage boy living in the meager, jungle village of Joabola, but everything changes when the feared Saurian Raiders show up in the village one day looking for him. His true identity is revealed and the Raiders blackmail him into accepting a quest which will be the undoing of the evil king of Ammoreith, under which they have all suffered. Edwin is forced into a role of great responsibility and along the journey he struggles with the choices between right and wrong, life or death, grace or forgiveness.

Conflict

What type of conflict do you see in the story? Give specific examples. Distinguish between major and minor conflicts.

Man vs. Man:

Major: Near the end of the story, during the climax, Edwin battles the King in an attempt of revenge but realizes that forgiveness is the only way to insure peace.

Minor: Edwin fights against the Saurian Raiders when they first capture him.

Minor: Nela, overcome with hatred, leads an attack on the King’s guards in an attempt to kill his son.

Man vs. Himself:

Major: Edwin finds himself in a position of great power and struggles with making the right choices for himself and the whole people of Ammorieth.

Minor: Nela has to deal with her hatred towards the King and her ability to trust others.

Man vs. Environment:

Minor: Edwin, Nela, and Kanashi must overcome the natural obstacles of their journey as well as man-made traps in the Labyrinth on Haelybi.

Theme

State the main theme or message of the story in universal terms that apply to everyone, regardless of age, race, or gender.

We must develop and maintain the capacity to forgive. There is some good in the worst of us and some evil in the best of us, therefore, no man is worthy to “cast a stone” (punish justly) toward another. When we discover this, we are less prone to hate our enemies. He who is devoid of the power to forgive is devoid of the power to love for only when the power of love overcomes the love of power will the world know peace.

Quoted from Edwin when asked the reason for sparing the undeserving king- “Because it is not victory I seek, but peace.

Feedback

What is your overall opinion of this story and why?

Loved the story from the very beginning!